The Statue Garden At Duncan's Bliss
My morning began with a concussive series of horrors.
My dream world was antiseptic and warm, permeated by the echoey, tinny murmurs over the intercom system. Somewhere, a machine beeped. I smelled Nurse Randa and rejoiced to be safe in my ward. I opened my eyes. The vicious cat was sitting on my chest, staring into my eyes with its unholy, malformed pupils.
I screamed and jerked. The cat dashed away with a sort of screeching howl. I sat on the floor and went to rub the gashes on my neck, but screamed again when I found the area to be blazing with pain.
Wincing and breathing hard I turned around to manoeuvre my way outside, but found the tiny doorway blocked by the fearsome face of a monstrous albino ape, eyes hard and lips sneering. "Buh!" I said, in a shining moment of eloquence and poise...
Dear readers,
It's finally happened: the free version of this science-fiction novel has been taken offline in order to make room for the hard-cover printed edition from Ephemera Bound Publishing, on sale in stores and online beginning Valentine's Day, 2008.
I regret any disappointment. I kept the free version available as long as I could. Please be sure to check out the new edition! See Cheeseburger Brown.com for news and updates.
Love,
Cheeseburger Brown
P.S. You can read more of my free stories via my weblog or in the complete fiction achives.
posted by Simon of Space at 09:05
20 Comments:
Holy crap, this is stupidly good. Really really fantastic writing. Keep it coming!
Thanks for another great episode!
A few typos (only because you asked we point them out):
In Paragraph 4 - maoeuvre/maneuver
In the paragraph Pish kisses Duncan goodnight - smal/small
You can delete this comment if you like (I won't mind)
Loving the story - keep 'em comming!
Thanks again - D
Dear Daedalux,
Thanks for the notes on the typos -- fixed and fixed.
I certainly won't delete your comment, as the comments in this story should stand as a part of its history since they form a part of the process.
Beyond typo notes you never know what element of conversation in the comments may inspire a future turn in the story. If you suggest something here and it appears in the text, you'll never know if was your idea or by my design, but if do don't do something stupid and ask me tell you then you will be free to imagine that you have contributed a thread to the narrative's tapestry.
All the more fun, in my view. And such comments should for the surfing world to see.
Love,
CheeseburgerBrown
Great story, fabulously interesting characters...
I find that I'm sad whenever Simon leaves a place, or the though of him leaving this new place, What happened to Crushed Head Faeda? I wonder if we will see her again, and I wonder if we will hear more about Duncan and Pish if/when Simon leaves this new place.
It is remarkable for a writer to create secondary characters that a reader really misses.
Keep up the good work, again, as I've said before, i Cannot wait until tomorrow (well, i can wait, but I won't like it...)
Dear Christien,
We have definitely not seen the last of Crushed Head Faeda.
Love,
CheeseburgerBrown
CheeseBurgerBrown,
That makes me very happy :)
Again, keep up the good work!
(back to waiting impatiently...)
On the subject of typos:
"We'll need to encode a new *identify* into *yours* bits."
(asterisks added for clarity)
Allow me to echo what christien said about secondary characters. In addition, I don't think I've ever been so eager to learn more about said characters. Bravo so far.
-an American who is slightly amused by the necessity for CBB's post yesterday
I find myself curious about the statue garden, as well as to what Duncan is running from. He's obviously familiar with forgery, but I wonder...
Hope you clear up the mess of dead robots in the yard with the next post! I am eagerly awaiting more.
Great story. Stumbled accross the page today and read from beginning to end. I look forward to checking back.
How often can we expect updates? Daily? Every other day? Whenever Simon feels like it?
Are you writing a day at a time or have you written a few chapters and are just typing them in?
I'm greatly enjoying this but hope for a few things...
First, don't let Duncan get caught so Simon has to watch his child. That'd be to Hollywood :)
Second, I'll be curious to read what happens when Simon meets his wife, if it IS his wife and not his Sister and her children. Will the urge of love and loneliness be there followed by a surge of passion and sexuality?
Hmmmmmm... Bookmarked.
Thanks for writing!
SV
scottievegas - check out CBB's comment from yesterday.
CBB - thanks again... and again... and again!
Tim
One more typo: "Maybe," he said again. "Maybe not. But either way what kind of I lesson do I teach my son if I refuse to stand for my actions?"
I'm a little nervous for Simon. Is it wise for him to get mixed up with Duncan? The innocent and the jaded...
Oh, it would be funny if Simon knew Duncan from his past life.
Enjoying...
I like the way the writer is challenging himself with respect to writing a character completely unlike Vader. It would have been easy to just give the fans what they think they want by writing more Star Wars. Kudos.
Line of the day:
"What did you think of that, Mr. Fell?" rumbled Duncan.
"I think I shall spend my entire life in debt to you for what you have given me tonight, no matter what I do."
Sweet.
To the Creative Forces of the Universe I give tahnks for such great writing!
and more importantly to CheeseBurgerBrown!!
I definitely get more inspired by the day!
When I pass my master's degree exams on mid july, I'll be whacking away at the keyboard...
Until then, I'll be reading eagerly this Story!
Dr. G
I started reading at the time that this was posted, and I find myself craving for more. I have the feeling that I'm reading a book that turns it's own pages :/.
Keep up the good work!
Continuing on what "ScottieVegas" said about his wife: I kind of wonder if it is possible that after the "Accident" if his plat and bits were hacked and the "wife and children" are fakes, there to try and get his money (as he seems to be rich), this might be a little too Hollywood was well, but would be interesting...
As usual, outstanding Matthew.
May I ask, how long does it take to write one post?
Dear Dave,
I'm not sure. I write a paragraph here, a paragraph there, whenever my main workstation is busy rendering or whatnot.
So...I guess the answer is: about a day.
Love,
CheeseburgerBrown
My Two favorites lines of the day:
1. "I think I shall spend my entire life in debt to you for what you have given me tonight, no matter what I do."
2. A large, brown, wolf-like animal snortled over to us, and inserted its muzzle into my crotch. "That's my dog"
this is really good but fartles?
Amazing.
you can borrow time, but you can't take back your past..
Wow.. and I am not even talking about the story telling yet.
You come up with this on a daily basis? With no idea how it will turn out? Well, CheeseBurgerBrown, it's turning out superbly.. and we all wait with bated breath. =)
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